Another poem looking for comments?

I think your rhymes are good, and they don't feel forced, like a lot of poems. What it lacks is rhythm and consistent syllables line-to-line. This is like prose/poetry, that is also like free verse and poetry put together. Not a lot of people do that, so it's not very common. I also noticed the last stanza doesn't match the rest with rhymes. So either fix that or take it out, cause it feels tacked on in order to just repeat the first stanza.